1) The pitch.
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
Feedback
I like that you included what your feedback was into your post so that I have a better idea of what you're talking about when you discuss your improvements. Statistics are always good in that it shows that you truly know what you're talking about and that your idea is necessary. The concept of it being "from the comfort of your home" and also filmed at home I also think is a good touch, because it gives your point a good visual. Keep up the good work and I think your idea is going to turn out great.
Hey Caleb. You have a great introduction for your online shopping service. I think it's a really awesome idea to have this product for those who have difficulty with finding their sizes in clothing stores and for those, like me, who are too lazy to go out most of the time. Your speech was well-rehearsed and very calm. I would say that a mention of your vision for this product would be the only thing missing from this attempt.
Hi Caleb,
Great job, I think you did a great job looking into the criticism and improving your pitch. I really like the tone and you definitely connect well with the audience. I think adding the stats was a great touch and really help drive home the point. Great job overall and really impressed with this pitch!
Hi Caleb,
I think you did a great job with the pitch. You showed that there is a clear demand for the product and used statistics to show that online shopping is not a fad-like trend. One suggestion, mention the actual product earlier. Until you mentioned your venture I thought you were starting a clothing company. Overall great job!
Reflection
A lot of the feedback was positive without too much criticism. The two points that came up were mention my vision for the product and possibly bring the product up sooner. I agree with stating my vision, that could be a good point to show investors and buyers what to expect. I do not agree with bringing the product up sooner. I think as of now the set up of the problem and then solution flow nicely and get the point across.
Feedback
I like that you included what your feedback was into your post so that I have a better idea of what you're talking about when you discuss your improvements. Statistics are always good in that it shows that you truly know what you're talking about and that your idea is necessary. The concept of it being "from the comfort of your home" and also filmed at home I also think is a good touch, because it gives your point a good visual. Keep up the good work and I think your idea is going to turn out great.
Hey Caleb. You have a great introduction for your online shopping service. I think it's a really awesome idea to have this product for those who have difficulty with finding their sizes in clothing stores and for those, like me, who are too lazy to go out most of the time. Your speech was well-rehearsed and very calm. I would say that a mention of your vision for this product would be the only thing missing from this attempt.
Hi Caleb,
Great job, I think you did a great job looking into the criticism and improving your pitch. I really like the tone and you definitely connect well with the audience. I think adding the stats was a great touch and really help drive home the point. Great job overall and really impressed with this pitch!
Hi Caleb,
I think you did a great job with the pitch. You showed that there is a clear demand for the product and used statistics to show that online shopping is not a fad-like trend. One suggestion, mention the actual product earlier. Until you mentioned your venture I thought you were starting a clothing company. Overall great job!
Reflection
A lot of the feedback was positive without too much criticism. The two points that came up were mention my vision for the product and possibly bring the product up sooner. I agree with stating my vision, that could be a good point to show investors and buyers what to expect. I do not agree with bringing the product up sooner. I think as of now the set up of the problem and then solution flow nicely and get the point across.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
From pitch No. 2 to No. 3 I added a quick sentence about my vision for the future from suggestion of the feedback.
Caleb,
ReplyDeleteI agree that the build up of the problem and then a proposed solution flows nicely in your pitch. Additionally, your tone of voice and presentation is nearly perfect. You successfully addressed the logistics and included a relevant statistic regarding current trends in the US. I wish I could provide you with some constructive criticism, but I don't have any. Fantastic job!
Hi Caleb,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really good job describing your vision and how to solve a problem that frequently comes up when you are online shopping. I liked how you presented the pitch and how you were able to go into detail on how you were going approach the problem logistically. I enjoyed the way that you ended it because it did a lot to engage the person watching. Great job!
Caleb, you clearly took the time to truly read and reflect upon your feedback from the previous posts. You stuck to your guts about bringing up the product at the time you thought was best and showed consumers and investors what to expect. Overall, I think you did a great job for your final pitch as you progressively improved the pitch.
ReplyDeleteCaleb,
ReplyDeleteIt is obvious you took the time to read the comments people have left you to improve your pitches and the progress you've made has been great. Your pitch, the order you bring up the topics, and presentation is very well done.